Re-re-re-revamping My Script!

Apr 08, 2019

Hello reader!

As you get over your shock from my on-time blog post, I’m here to tell you that we’re on draft number 4 (or 5? I’ve lost count at this point) of my pilot script. Which is a good thing! I had a full-on case of writer’s block and had 0 inspiration last week. So much so, that I had nothing to show either of my advisors, which was embarrassing, to say the least. But reading my character sheet and pilot outline (and maybe rewatching ‘Pride & Prejudice’ (2005)) gave me the surge of inspiration I needed to write up a storm, and 5 hours later, I had 29 pages of pilot script on my hands! Since most 30 minute sitcoms are actually 22 minutes long with 8 minutes for ads, I actually needed to write 22 pages, so, yay for writing too much!

Below is a link to read the current version of my pilot, but don’t get too attached because it is absolutely going to change 😉

‘P&P’ – Pilot – V.3 

I’m pretty happy with this new script; I don’t vehemently hate it like I do with earlier drafts of the pilot. This version preserves a couple of the scenes that I had in earlier drafts like the “Netherfield Hall has been let” scene and the public ball scene where we first meet Mr. Darcy and his gang. But the biggest issue with these scenes is that they’re unnecessarily long but I don’t know where to cut lines because ohmygodilovethesescenessomuch. The “Netherfield Hall” scene is 5 minutes long, which, if you’ve ever seen any sitcom ever, is way too long for one scene.

Despite the length, I’m very proud/happy with how the scenes flow together and the actual presence of an A and B-plot which my earlier versions sorely lacked. Versions 1 and 2 had the whole family focused on Mr. Bingley and the quest to gather more information about him. But in this version, Elizabeth sets Jane up on a bunch of dates after Jane gets left at the altar while Mrs. Bennet and the other daughters focus on gathering more information about Mr. Bingley & Co. The two plots speak to the characters’ personalities and what they value; Elizabeth prioritizes her relationship with Jane over anything else, while Mrs. Bennet is desperate to see her daughters married.

Before you ask, no I haven’t and won’t abandon all the other amazing characters like Lydia, Kitty, and Mr. Bennet. I have character arcs and storylines all planned, but unfortunately, not for a while 🙁 You can check out those arcs here!

That’s all I have for this post, folks! But check in next time for my advisors’ response to my new pilot!

This week, I’ve been listening to Hozier’s song ‘Movement’ off his new album Wasteland, Baby! specifically, the version recorded at Spotify Studios, which I would argue is the better version of ‘Movement’ (my hot take for the week). It gives me ethereal, epic vibes and it’s so good! (WordPress is being annoying again so I can’t upload a picture of the cover art)


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